When I taught my screenwriting class, I told the students I would only correct grammar if I noticed an error. If the characters are interesting, the story engaging, and the meaning clear, I didn't give a hoot about dangling participles or whatever. But if I wrote a note, that meant 1) they had made a mistake but worse, 2) I didn't really like the story anyway. Both had to be addressed.
Absolutely! I don't mean to excuse poor grammar, but rather point out that the purpose is clarity and to give the reader an experience, which your examples illustrate wonderfully.
Bad grammar, punctuation, and unclear sentences are automatic put-downs.
As for danglers, they are put down and minor headache givers. 😂😂😂😂.
Hmm -- does that include the wizard's checklist for his pack, given the fragments?
Love the reminder that clarity trumps correctness, and that style, not syntax, keeps the reader in the spell.
When I taught my screenwriting class, I told the students I would only correct grammar if I noticed an error. If the characters are interesting, the story engaging, and the meaning clear, I didn't give a hoot about dangling participles or whatever. But if I wrote a note, that meant 1) they had made a mistake but worse, 2) I didn't really like the story anyway. Both had to be addressed.
Very true!
Still, it's wise to not assume the reader is that engaged.
Absolutely! I don't mean to excuse poor grammar, but rather point out that the purpose is clarity and to give the reader an experience, which your examples illustrate wonderfully.