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MD Streeter's avatar

Oh, dang, I love the past perfect, but I know it sounds clunky sometimes (usually?) and I have made efforts to minimize it when I edit. Still love it though.

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Mary Catelli's avatar

The problem is not so much sounding clunky is that when your characters are thinking about the past, they aren't moving the story forward in the present.

Usually. Just to keep us on our toes.

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Jay Logan's avatar

Thanks for the writing advice. I am still deep in the learning phase and try to pick up these things - though it can get overwhelming at times.

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Mary Catelli's avatar

Sometimes you have to put them to use in separate passes. It can be the only way to apply them all -- not at once.

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